Need help to edit my draft letter

[Eugene1982]

Hello All,

Please find time to edit my draft letter, I need this ASAP. Many many thanks in advance.

DATE : January 23, 2009

TO : Mr. Bai Tarrow
Tarrow Company
Telephone No. :

Fax No. :

SUBJECT : Arrange Communication for Future Contracts
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Dear Mr. Trrow,

Greetings…

Please arrange communication for our future contracts. Kindly be advised also that we will be having a signing of contract next week in Riyadh.

For further details, please feel free to get in touch with the undersigned.

Looking forward for your valuable reply as soon as possible.


Sincerely yours,


Dr. Nil E. Hobbins

[1984law]

Hello All,

Please find time to edit my draft letter, I need this ASAP. Many many thanks in advance.

DATE : January 23, 2009

TO : Mr. Bai Tarrow
Tarrow Company
Telephone No. :

Fax No. :

SUBJECT : Arrange Communication for Future Contracts
--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Dear Mr. Trrow,

Greetings…

Please arrange communication for our future contracts. Kindly be advised also that we will be having a signing of contract next week in Riyadh.

For further details, please feel free to get in touch with the undersigned.

Looking forward for your valuable reply as soon as possible.


Sincerely yours,


Dr. Nil E. Hobbins

Hi, there

You are kindly requsted to make all necessary arrangements concerning our communication. We would also like to inform you that we will be signing a contract next week in Riyad.
For further details ......Ok
Looking forward to hear from you as soon as possible.

Hope I have been helpful. Just one comment; I understand that in your native language you tend to be very polite- that is why you wrote valuable answer- but in formal letters or business ones, the language is polite but in a strict way. So, I wouldn't write valuable answer in a business letter, though I understand your point.

[Eugene1982]

Many thanks 1984law. It really helped me a lot.