Letter of Application

[Martz]

many thanks in advance to those who'll help correcting my letter
Here's the task:

Write a letter of application to a children's summer camp in Scotland
You can choose a job from these: sports supervisor, activities supervisor, kitchen helper and office administrator.

Dear Mr Reid,
I have seen your advertisement on the internet and I am writing to apply for a summer job as a kitchen helper in your camp.
I am a 17-years-old student from Italy, and I can already speak some English, as you can see.
I'm about to finish school, but I'd love to spend these summer holidays in a different way.
I'm a self confidant, reliable, and hard-working person.
I'm interested in doing this job because I've always loved cooking and I get every day the dinner ready at home, so I can say I have some "kind of experience". Moreover, I love working with children, I have many small cousins with whom I spend lot of time.
I'd like you to tell me how much free time off would I have to explore Scotland, if possible, so that I can choose which places to visit in advance.
I look forward to hearing from you,
Kind regards,
Marta

[Gillnetter]

many thanks in advance to those who'll help correcting my letter
Here's the task:

Write a letter of application to a children's summer camp in Scotland
You can choose a job from these: sports supervisor, activities supervisor, kitchen helper and office administrator.

Dear Mr Reid,
I have seen read your advertisement on the Internet and I am writing to apply for a summer job as a kitchen helper in your camp. I am a 17-years-old 17 year old student from Italy, and I can already speak some English, as you can see (Because you can write in English does not mean that you can speak in English).
I'm about to finish school, but I'd love to spend these summer holidays in a different way.
I'm a self confidant, reliable, and hard-working person.
I'm interested in doing this job because I've always loved cooking and I get every day the dinner ready at home every day, so I can say I have some "kind of experience". Moreover, I love working with children, I have many small cousins with whom I spend lot of time.
I'd like you to tell me how much free time off would I have to explore Scotland, if possible, so that I can choose which places to visit in advance. (I don't think that this would be appropriate in this type of letter)
I look forward to hearing from you,
Kind regards,
Marta

Gil

[Martz]

thank you indees :)