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    andouze is offline Newbie
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    Default Could you check my sentence please

    "My ambition is to work as a program manager for international NGOs promoting child rights. In that perspective, I regard gaining experience of proposal and report writing as a constructive feature."

    I am wondering about "constructive feature", not sure it make sense...
    Thanks for your help

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    Default Re: Could you check my sentence please

    Quote Originally Posted by andouze View Post
    "My ambition is to work as a program manager for international NGOs promoting child rights. In that perspective, I regard gaining experience of proposal and report writing as a constructive feature."

    I am wondering about "constructive feature", not sure it make sense...
    Thanks for your help
    If I were you, I would write like this.

    "My goal is to work as a program manager in an international NGO that promotes better rights for children. In this regard, I see gaining experience of working on proposals and writing reports as a productive feature."


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    Default Re: Could you check my sentence please

    hello !!
    Well thanks for your suggestion, what do you mean by " Iahve more experts in my team" ? Because as you might have understand I am looking for a job / intership thus I need hips of help

    Thanks again for your time,

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    Default Re: Could you check my sentence please

    Quote Originally Posted by andouze View Post
    "My ambition is to work as a program manager for international NGOs promoting child rights. In that perspective, I regard gaining experience of proposal and report writing as a constructive feature."

    I am wondering about "constructive feature", not sure it make sense...
    Thanks for your help
    "...I regard gaining experience in proposal and report writing as a constructive feature."

    "...I regard gaining the experience of proposal and report writing as a constructive feature."

    "Constructive feature" makes sense, but it is of value to you and not to the NGO.

    I would change it to something like this, "The experience in proposal and report writing that I will gain will be a positive benefit to XXX.

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