official letter

[akbar]

I have a sample letter again. Please make corrections .pls…

[U]This is to bring to your kind notice that I had requested the settlement of my family status. Now I am extremely sad to inform that I have not received a favourable response from your side so far. This is just to remind you my request as I have been serving your company for more than five years.
In advance I express my profound gratitude and from my family also if you take a prompt action. Please get the needful done without any further loss of time. I feel confident of receiving a favourable and helpful reply.
Yours faithfully,
Akbar[/U
i have to submit this letter soon. pls reply as soon as possible.

[Tdol]

Who are you writing to? If you're writing to a native speaker, I think the tone is wrong. If it's a native speaker, I'd just write:

Dear ...,
I am writing to enquire about the settlement of my family status which I requested (date of earlier letter), and to ask whether this could be settled at your earliest convenience.

Thanking you in advance, I look forward to hearing from you.