Informal letter (FCE)

[sleek]

Hi guys, I've just finished my writing which you can see below. Thank you for your corrections.
-----
Hi Matt,

Thank you for your email. As I mentioned earlier I’m really interested in taking photos. So, I want to continue my education in Canada by taking a short course in a digital photo. I think it would be a good addition to my primary degree.

I would be pleased if you could help me with collecting relevant information about courses such as subjects which are included, cost, duration, etc.

I’m thrilled to hear that I can share a flat with your friends and at the same time making new friends and saving money on accommodations.

Regarding our leisure I prefer doing a trip to the Rockey Mountain because I really like magnificent natural landscapes and maybe I’ll have opportunity to practice in taking photos.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Regards,
Sergey

[emsr2d2]

Hi guys, I've just finished my writing which you can see below. Thank you for your corrections.
-----
Hi Matt,

Thank you for your email. As I mentioned earlier I’m really interested in taking photos. So, I want to continue my education in Canada by taking a short course in a digital photography. I think it would be a good addition to my primary degree.

I would be pleased if you could help me with collecting to collect relevant information about courses, such as subjects which are included, cost, duration, etc.

I’m thrilled to hear that I can share a flat with your friends and at the same time making new friends and saving money on accommodations.
because I'll be able to make new friends at the same time as saving money on accommodation.

Regarding our leisure time, I would prefer doing to make a trip to the Rocky Mountains because I really like magnificent natural landscapes and maybe I’ll have the opportunity to practice in taking photos.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Regards,
Sergey

See above.

[sleek]

Thank you very much!