Please correct my cover letter

[nelinda]

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Dear Ms. name removed by moderator,

When I was reading a magazine, I was accidentally saw your advertisement at the newspaper. Your company was looking for a immediate Receptionist. And that job was I am looking for.

After I done research about your company, I was interested to apply on the said position. I've been in the Barxone Company for more than 5 years in the same field. I am sure that I was capable of the job based on my work experienced that was I enclosed in my resume.

I do hope hearing the feedback regarding with my application. If you could allow me, I want to call you next week or drop by to your office to get more information regarding for the job.
Thank you for consideration for my letter.

Sincerely yours,

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[Barb_D]

Your potential employer does not want to hear that you are finding out about their job by accident.

They don't really care that you like them; they want to know why they will like you.

You do not "drop by" an office to see if they will tell you more about the position.

Please visit a few job posting sites and review their sample cover letters. I'm sorry to say that yours would have been thrown in the recycle bin the moment I saw you found us by accident.

[nelinda]

Thank you so much. Now, I know whats wrong with my cover letter.