Hello tdol,
Thanks so much for your guidance!
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Originally Posted by tdol Format:
my The Moonlight Restaurant premise- I'd say my restaurant, The Moonlihght Restaurant, (and delete 'premise)
For your information, my Ampang Jaya premise of The Moonlight Restaurant has been set up in and operating since December 2002.- FYI sounds too aggressive. Do you have more than one restaurant? If not, delete the first part. Delete 'set up and' |
Concerning the letter, yes it has more than one restaurants, so should I delete 'premise'?
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Originally Posted by tdol The business has been doing well for the past few years but has undergone a drastic slump ever since the construction work started this January.- shouldn't you have a coma in here? |
I don't really understand what you meant. Did you mean it's supposed to be like this:
The business has been doing well for the past few years, but has undergone a drastic slump ever since the construction work started this January.
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Originally Posted by tdol hygieneissue- spacing and I'd use the plural |
hygiene issues.
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Originally Posted by tdol beautification trees- wrong word |
I can't think of a replacement for the words...
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Originally Posted by tdol Hereby I sincerely appeal so- word order and one word needs to be deleted |
Hereby I appeal so...