Letter of complaint-pls check my huge bunch of mistakes :-)

[sweetakasha]

"I am writing to make a complaint concerning catering of our
 students. At the last meeting of the Students’ board we have negotiated
 this problem and students are not satisfied with following:  
  The quality of the food has gone down in comparison with last year and in
 our opinion it is inadequate to the price we pay for.
  Food is often cold. With regard to the fact that we are served by the
 apprentices, their service is on the lower level and unprofessional. It
 happens that the cutleries, plates and tables are dirty. 
  We think that the reason of the above-mentioned problems is incorrect
 schedule of catering. 
  You are requested to arrange a meeting with the manager of Satel hotel
 responsible for catering and attempt to find solution to the problem. 
  We suggest so that at the time when our students go to lunch (i.e.
 12.10-14.40), the employees of the Municipal Office not to go there."
THANKS

[Anglika]

Welcome to the forums.

Originally Posted by sweetakasha

"I am writing to make a complaint concerning catering of ["cater for" - in this instance "the catering for" ] our students. At the last meeting of the Students’ Board we have negotiated [discussed]this problem and students are not satisfied with following:

The quality of the food has gone down in comparison with last year and in our opinion it is inadequate to the price we pay for.[in relation to the price we pay for it]

Food is often cold.

With regard to the fact that we are served by the apprentices, their service is on the lower level and unprofessional. It happens that the cutleries[cutlery] , plates and tables are often dirty.

We think that the reason of [for] the above-mentioned problems is incorrect schedule of catering.
You are requested to arrange a meeting with the manager of Satel Hotel, which is responsible for catering, and attempt to find solution to the problem.
We suggest so [delete]that at the time when our students go to lunch (i.e. 12.10-14.40), the employees of the Municipal Office do not to go for theirs"

THANKS

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[sweetakasha]

Oh, thank you so much, Anglika!!

[RonBee]

A couple of minor suggestions.

Say:

The food is often cold.

"Food is often cold" says that food in general is often cold (which may be true). "The food is often cold" means that the food they have been serving you is often cold.

Also, say:

...attempt to find a solution to the problem.

~R

[sweetakasha]

xixi, you are right with this FOOD...it could come to my mind...
thank you RonBee