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Old 10-Nov-2007, 13:10
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Dear Friends,

Today I just met two professors of the stuff of my future job. I would like to send an email to the professor in charge because since the first moment we have been emailing each other. I think it will be good if a write an email and say thank you.

I wrote the next sentences, please help me to correct any grammatical mistake or inadequate expression.

Dear Prof. :

Thank you very much for the pleasant time I had this afternoon meeting both of you. Through our conversation, I have a much clearer understanding about the opening of French classes at Luterian Institute from next year. Truly I am very delighted and excited about teaching French at Luterian Institute; I appreciate your time to show me the classrooms because after seeing them I am very much motivated because I saw the classrooms where in a near future I will be teaching French. Besides, I think the classrooms are very well equipment and very much modern; I am looking to use these advantageous resources in my French classes.
I also very much appreciate your willingness to share your knowledge on anthropological research and experience with me.

Sincerely,

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Today I just met two professors of the stuff of my future job.
Don't you mean staff? Anyhow, you might want to try:
Today I met two professors who are going to be colleagues of mine where I am going to be working.
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I would like to send an email to the professor in charge because since we met we have been emailing each other. I think it will be good idea if I would write an email and say thank you.

I wrote the following sentences. Please help me correct any grammatical mistakes or inadequate expressions.
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Dear Prof. :

Thank you very much for the pleasant time I had this afternoon meeting both of you. Through our conversation, I have a much clearer understanding about the opening of French classes at Luterian Institute from next year. Truly I am very delighted and excited about teaching French at Luterian Institute; I appreciate your time to show me the classrooms because after seeing them I am very much motivated because I saw the classrooms where in a near future I will be teaching French. Besides, I think the classrooms are very well equipment and very much modern; I am looking to use these advantageous resources in my French classes.
I also very much appreciate your willingness to share your knowledge on anthropological research and experience with me.

Sincerely,


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Dear Prof. :
Thank you very much for the pleasant time I had this afternoon meeting both of you. Through our conversation, I have a much clearer understanding about the opening of French classes at Luterian Institute from next year. Truly I am very delighted and excited about teaching French at Luterian Institute; I appreciate your time showing me the classrooms, because after seeing them I am very much motivated because I saw the classrooms where in the near future I will be teaching French. I think the classrooms are very well equipped and very modern; I am looking forward to using those advantageous resources in my French classes.
I also very much appreciate your willingness to share your knowledge about anthropological research and experience with me.
Sincerely,
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The last sentence ("I very much appreciate....") could be better, but it is, I suppose, adequate. Certainly, it is not possible to share experience. (We can tell people about our experiences, but we cannot share them.)

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Dear friend,

Thank you very much for your advise, I tried to improve my letter and wrote this, what do you think?

Dear Prof.

Thank you very much for the pleasant time I had yesterday meeting you both. I am really delighted and excited about teaching French, and I appreciate the time you spent showing me the classrooms. After seeing them I am very motivated because that is where I will be teaching French in a near future. Besides, I think the classrooms are very well equipped and modern; I am looking forward to using these advanced resources in my French classes.
I also appreciate very much your willingness to share information about your research work and the conferences at AJTP Association and JIWS. I am very much interested and my husband too, we both will try to attend the conference this weekend.

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Corrections, suggestions in red.

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Dear friend,

Thank you very much for your advice. I tried to improve my letter and wrote this. What do you think?

Dear Prof.

Thank you very much for the pleasant time I had yesterday meeting you both. I am really delighted and excited about teaching French, and I appreciate the time you spent showing me the classrooms. After seeing them I am very motivated because that is where I will be teaching French in the near future. Besides, I think the classrooms are very well equipped and modern; I am looking forward to using these advanced resources in my French classes.
I also appreciate very much your willingness to share information about your research work and the conferences at AJTP Association and JIWS. I am very much interested in the subject, and my husband is too. We both will try to attend the conference this weekend.

Sincerely,




Note:
You could say also instead of too in the next to last sentence.
(The word reprinted in white is a suggested deletion.)


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