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hello everybody, well I'm student of english and well I do this letter of gratefulnes and how I never I do this. I need help if its ok or no or is possible any modificatin or anything. I'm sorry if this is very long.

Sergio Hernández Hernández
Jr. Arequipa 1336
031 - Lima
Teléfono: 9997777

Luís Castaneda Lossio

Major of Lima

Jr. de la Unión 300 / Jr. Conde de Superunda 177
01 - Lima

Lima, February 13, 2008

Dear Sir.:

I am writing this gratefulnes letter for the big things that you do for this city.

During you period the city of Lima has recovered part of your beauty that by the years has been lost. with the creation of the park of the wall, the remodeling of the park of Lima has gained enough in creation of new sites of stroll of the familias. and with his last remodeling of the magical circuit of the water, being this last a wonder because in the night is a great aquatic spectacle. With regard to the routes of circulation of automobiles I know that you have a great preoccupation to improve the routes of transport in all Lima.

Good in spite of its great preoccupation and great dedication for improving the city in the different aspects. I believe that in spite of his efforts to improve the city it is not sufficient because the transport is even a chaos, the delinquency grows constantly, and you would request to him that it puts greater preoccupation with regard to the citizen security because Lima every day is more dangerous by the assaults, robberies to the step, kidnapping, violations, I hope that you put a better system in which it concerns the citizen security and the public order.

Good thanking for that you can read my letter I take leave wishing my him parabienes and that it continues improving the services in the capital city.

faithfully

Sergio Hernández Hernández

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Sergio Hernández Hernández
Jr. Arequipa 1336
031 - Lima
Teléfono: 9997777

Luís Castaneda Lossio

Major of Lima

Jr. de la Unión 300 / Jr. Conde de Superunda 177
01 - Lima

Lima, February 13, 2008

Dear Sir.:

I am writing this thank you letter for all the things that you do for this city.

During your term the city of Lima has recovered part of its beauty that through the years had been lost. With the creation of the park of the wall, the park of Lima has been improved with new places for family's to stroll. I especially like the remodeling of the magical circuit of the water. It is a wonder in the night and a wonderful aquatic spectacle. With regard to the automobile traffic congestion, I know that you have a great plans to improve the roads and traffic patterns in all Lima.

I appreciate all you are doing to improve the city however, the traffic situation is still very chaotic and delinquency grows constantly. Therefore, I request that you give greater attention to citizen security because day-by-day Lima is more dangerous through assaults, robberies, kidnapping and other violations of the law. I hope that soon you will engage a more effective system that will improve the security of citizens and public order.

Thank you for reading my letter. I take leave wishing you well and continued success in improving the services of the capital city.

faithfully

Sergio Hernández Hernández