Kindly correct the letter

[JRD]

At the outset, I would like to thank you for your order that given to us, for your advertisement to be displayed in our plasma screens.

As you requested, your advertisement is being displayed in our plasma screens which have been located in the following areas, for a period of fifty days which effective 26.05.08
xxxxxx, xxxxxx, xxxxxx

In case of any clarifications, please feel free to call the undersigned.

Thank you for your kind co-operation in this regard

Yours faithfully,

[MashUK]

1)Dear Sir/Madam
2)Dear Mr/Mrs/Ms Brown
I am writing to update you on your order progress.
First of all, I would like to thank you/let me thank you for your order.

As requested, your advertisement will be displayed on our plasma screens located in the following areas, for a period of fifty days effective 26.05.08
xxxxxx, xxxxxx, xxxxxx

Should you have any questions, please feel free to contact anyone listed below.

Thank you for your kind co-operation.

Looking forward to hearing from you in the near future.

1)Yours faithfully,
2)Yours sincerely,

John Bulls
(signature)
Line Manager
IT Department
Crown Corp.