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Old 10-Sep-2008, 12:59
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Dear President

I am writing in response to your advertisement for taking students in shiraz university.If it is no bother, could you answer some questions about this?



I would be grateful for a list the main majors offered,with information about the location of the courses ,and the nature of the university.I would also like to know about the days as i am a teacher and can only at present study when i am not working.Is it possible to adjust the days?


I'd like to study at shiraz university and to continue my studies.I am looking forwad to hearing from you.


Yours faithfully
Linda Shraie
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Dear Mr./Madam President,

I am writing in response to your advertisement regarding admissions into Shiraz University. If you don't mind, I would appreciate the opportunity to ask you some questions.

I would appreciate it if you could send me a list of the primary majors the University offers. I would also appreciate any information you could provide regarding the nature of the University (You should probably specify what exactly you mean by this. You could ask specific questions about the student body, the campus, the class rooms, the teachers, etc.)

I am currently employed as a teacher (You may wish to mention where you teach), and require some flexibility in regards to attendance. Is the University flexible in this regard?

I would very much like to attend Shiraz University and continue my education and growth. I look forward earnestly to your reply.

Yours faithfully,
Linda Shraie

I added some fancy words, if you don't mind . You might want to wait until some other people give their revisions, I might have made a mistake or two, and some people are much more eloquent than I am. Still, this is how I might word it if I were in your situation.

I also don't know if there are any significant cultural differences when it comes to dealing with high-ranking University types. Let me know what you think. You are allowed to be critical!
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With due respect - too many appearances of "appreciate".

I would like to take this opportunity to ask some questions.

I would be grateful if you could send me a list....

Any information you can give me about the university would be appreciated. I am particularly concerned with ..........
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hello
many thanks for your kindness.that was very nice of you to send me reply.i would learn
somethings are imporatnt.
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hello
thank you alot for your reply.that was very kind of you to sent this letter.
i learned somethings are important.
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Yeah, I threw a few "appreciates" in there, didn't I? That's why we have you, right?
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i really appreciate all your help.
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