[General] Cover Letter

[claudiocrs]

Hi All,

I've written the following "cover letter". I know it doesn't show anything about me, anyway, I'd appreciate if someone give me a feedback.

Thank you in advance


"
To whom it may concern

I'll graduate in Electrical Engineering at Federal University of Santa Catarina on December 2008, and I am interested in applying for a position at XXX.
My resume is attached, anyway let me know if any further information on my background and qualifications is needed.

I would be grateful if you send my a feedback

Sincerely

Claudio
"

[Anglika]

First observation. If you are trying to get a job in a company, find out who you need to contact and address the letter to that person. Usually company websites will give the name of personnel managers to whom applications are made.

Second observation. It is too informal for a first approach, and gives a potential employer no idea of you or your ability. In fact, it is somewhat off-putting in its casual nature. You need to tell them why you want a job in that particular company and what you can bring to the company.

[thedaffodils]

I'm neither a teacher nor a native speaker. I agree with Anglika. Besides that, here's my two cents.

1. You can start with "Dear Sir or Madam" if you don't really know who is responsible for the recruiting.

2. I prefer to mention about how I know there's an opening in their company. Thus, I will start with the sentence as below:

I'm writing in response to your advertisement....

(This indicates the information.)

3. If you learn it from the advertisement, there must be some job description. You can write to them how you are fit in it.

4. Tell them why you are intertested in their company.

5. Short description about your personality seems good to me.

6. If you don't the name of the person you are writing to, you should write "Yours faithfully,"; if you know, you should write "Yours sincerely".

[claudiocrs]

Well, actually I don't know if there is an opening position.
I thought that if I had sent them this brief text would be better since I will graduate in one month and unfortunately I have no experience in the area that the company works.I know they provide a training before you start working.
Well, I'll try to write something better and you post it later.
Thank you all

[thedaffodils]

Hi Claudiocrs,

I think some companies would like to recruit newly graduates.

(1) Though you might not have related job experience, still I think you can tell them the why they would like to hire you, such as the points as below :

• You had related experence from your part-time job
• You are a go-getter;
• You are dynamic;
• You are a team player;
• You are a quick-learner.
• You are a straight A student

Of course, those are just my suggestions. You should write according to your own situation.

(2) Why are you interested in their company?

(3) Since they are not recruiting, you might tell them why you write to them. If I were the personnel manager, I would feel abrupt to hear from your application. Thus, you might ask them whether there's an opening in their company. If no, you hope your resume would be kept in their database of human resources. In case there's a suitable position for you in the future, you will be happy to be contacted.