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Another reason I love to travel during the vacation . I enjoy to visit another country or city . I love to see their antiquity and I like to eat in their restaurant with my relative . Also before I move from that country I like to buy from their stores because I love to remembers that amazing time when I come back to my country.
The main reason that I enjoy of my vacation is that we have a lot of wedlock parties . I like to go to all that parties because I spend very happy time with all people who I know . I can not imagine my life without exciting vacation.
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Another reason I love to travel during the vacation . I enjoy to visit another country or city .
Another reason I love to travel during vacation is I enjoy visiting other countries and cities.



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I love to see their antiquity, and I like to eat in their restaurant with my relative.
What do you mean by "antiquity" there? Ruins? Old houses?


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I mean old houses
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You like to visit the shops? You go to a lot of weddings?

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please help me I need it all corrected

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Well, you can't look at antiquity, but you can look at old houses. With the help of the suggestions you have received you can now do a rewrite. Post it here.


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Ok what about the grammar is it correct?
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Another reason I love to travel during the vacation is I enjoy to visit another countries or cities . I love to see their old houses and I like to eat in their restaurant with my relative . Also before I move from that country I like to buy from their shops because I love to remembers that amazing time when I come back to my country.
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Another reason I love to travel during the vacation is that I enjoy visiting other countries and cities . I love to see their old houses and I like to eat in their restaurants with my relatives. Also, before leaving that country I like to buy souvenirs from the local shops, because I love to have things to remind me of that amazing time when get back to my own country.
The main reason that I enjoy my vacations is that we have a lot of marriage parties. I like to go to all these parties because, at them, I spend a very happy time with all my friends and family. I can not imagine my life without exciting vacations.

I have made some corrections, while trying not to interfere too much with your style of writing.
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