correct this memo

[Sanjeev]

Is this memo is correct?

Please be informed that the duty timings of staff are as follows;
From Saturday to Thursday 08am to 5:30pm including one hour lunch break. Whoever worked Saturday full time, are allowed to have half day leave on Thursday and those who worked full day on Thursday can take half day leave on Saturday. In addititon to, employee who worked more than 48hrs in a week are entititled to claim overtime.

[Anglika]

Is this memo is correct?

Please be informed that working hours are as follows:

From Saturday to Thursday 08.00 to 5:30pm, including one hour lunch break. Whoever works a full Saturday is allowed to have a half day leave on Thursday and those who worked full day on Thursday can take a half day leave on Saturday. Any employee who worked more than 48hrs in a week is entititled to claim overtime.

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If you use the 24-hour clock, you do not need to include am/pm

08.00 = 8.00am
17.30 = 5.30 pm