Formal letter

[fateme]

Hi

Can Someone help me correct my letter

I would like to make a personal contact within a department I'm interested in. I have written a letter to a professor I know and would appreciate your help. I am eager to know whether the letter has any mistakes.

This is the letter:

Dear Prof. ...

I have finished the required courses for a Ph.D. degree in river and marine hydraulic eng. at the University of Tehran, and I am currently deciding on a thesis subject. Regarding the consultation I received from you, I would like to apply for the Australian endeavor scholarship that is available for the year 2011. Although it may be early for such a request, but as the endeavor scholarship requires a proposal that is relevant to the needs and interests of Australia, I would very much appreciate your help in selecting a thesis subject that can be continued as a research in Australia.

I am very much interested in conducting the research at the University of .... and it would especially be an honor if I could carry out the research under your supervision. I am writing to know if there exists any such opportunity for me. I have studied a number of your papers and also several theses that have been written with your supervision. I was especially interested in the paper “Boussinesq modelling of transient rip currents” and I’m enthusiastic about working on a similar subject.

Regarding my training and my interest in subjects related to ocean circulation, I am convinced that if given the chance, I will be able to make a meaningful contribution to your research effort.

I look forward to hearing from you
Sincerely
..............




Thanks for your help

Fateme

[Soup]

Hi fateme

Your letter is fine. Submit it. (If I could make one or two suggestions. You may want to consider mentioning (i) what you found interesting about the prof's research, and (ii) something about your own research, either past or present or both.)

All the best.

[fateme]

Thanks soup! I appreciate your help.

[Soup]

Thanks soup! I appreciate your help.

You're most welcome.