[Grammar] ... in order to calm their solders, all fleets had their own Buddhist preachers.

[kadioguy]

(On a board)

Japan attacked Taiwan in 1895, when large amount of Japanese fleets invaded Taiwan, in order to calm their solders, all fleets had their own Buddhist preachers.
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Is it a run-on sentence? I would use either (a) or (b) below. What do you think?

a. Japan attacked Taiwan in 1895, when large amount of Japanese fleets invaded Taiwan; in order to calm their solders, all fleets had their own Buddhist preachers.

b. Japan attacked Taiwan in 1895, when large amount of Japanese fleets invaded Taiwan. In order to calm their solders, all fleets had their own Buddhist preachers.
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[jutfrank]

Yes, it's written incorrectly.

For a quick fix, I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article before large amount.

(I don't much like the first sentence, by the way.)

 

[Tarheel]

You can use either a semicolon or a period. (It seems odd to me to calm soldiers just before a battle, but what do I know?)

 

[Tarheel]

Perhaps:

Japan attacked Taiwan in 1895 when a large number of ships carried an invasion force there.

(I wouldn't use fleet that way.)

 

[kadioguy]

Thank you both, jutfrank and Tarheel.

For a quick fix, I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article before large amount.

I am wondering about the use of "remembering". Can I take it to mean something like:

... I'd correct it to your version b. and I'd remember to add the required article ....
↓
... I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article ...

You can use either a semicolon or a period. (It seems odd to me to calm soldiers just before a battle, but what do I know?)

 

[Tarheel]

You could use fleet to refer to the group of ships.

 

[teechar]

soldiers

You misspelled that three times in your post.
Do you know why the spell checker wouldn't pick it up?

 

[kadioguy]

You misspelled that three times in your post.
Do you know why the spell checker wouldn't pick it up?

I am embarrassed about that.

"Solder" is a word meaning "a mixture of metals that is heated and melted and then used to join metals, wires, etc. together"; it is really a word itself, so the spell checker wouldn't pick it up.

I am wondering about the use of "remembering". Can I take it to mean something like:

... I'd correct it to your version b. and I'd remember to add the required article ....
↓
... I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article ...

I am not sure of the reason "remembering" is used in the "-ing" form. Was I right in thinking that in post #5? Could someone please help me?

 

[tedmc]

"Large amount of fleets" is not correct".

 

[kadioguy]

... remembering to add the required article before large amount.

"Large amount of fleets" is not correct".

Thank you both. It should be "a large amount of fleets".

 

[jutfrank]

I am wondering about the use of "remembering". Can I take it to mean something like:

... I'd correct it to your version b. and I'd remember to add the required article ....
↓
... I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article ...

Come on, kadioguy. You know what I mean. I don't believe for a moment that you don't.

Observe/notice how I used the present participle phrase to express what I wanted to say.

 

[kadioguy]

I am wondering about the use of "remembering". Can I take it to mean something like:

... I'd correct it to your version b. and I'd remember to add the required article ....
↓
... I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article ...

Come on, kadioguy. You know what I mean. I don't believe for a moment that you don't.

Observe/notice how I used the present participle phrase to express what I wanted to say.

Hi jutfrank,

Can I say you used this one:

For a quick fix, I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article before large amount.

to mean this one:

For a quick fix, I'd correct it to your version b., and (I'd) remember to add the required article before large amount.

I was trying my best to know what you meant.

 

[Tarheel]

Hi jutfrank,

Can I say you used this one:

For a quick fix, I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article before large amount.

to mean this one:

For a quick fix, I'd correct it to your version b., and (I'd) remember to add the required article before large amount.

I was trying my best to know what you meant.

I guess you're not used to that phrase. He just meant be sure to do it or don't forget to do it. In other words, don't leave it out.

 

[Tarheel]

I was trying my best to know what you meant.

Try:

I'm doing my best to understand. (Sorry if I'm beating a dead horse.)

 

[kadioguy]

I am wondering about the use of "remembering". Can I take it to mean something like:

... I'd correct it to your version b. and I'd remember to add the required article ....
↓
... I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article ...

Come on, kadioguy. You know what I mean. I don't believe for a moment that you don't.

Observe/notice how I used the present participle phrase to express what I wanted to say.

Hi jutfrank,

Can I say you used this one:

For a quick fix, I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article before large amount.

to mean this one:

For a quick fix, I'd correct it to your version b., and (I'd) remember to add the required article before large amount.

I guess you're not used to that phrase. He just meant be sure to do it or don't forget to do it. In other words, don't leave it out.

Thank you.

I said that in post #5 and #13, because I associated this sentence

For a quick fix, I'd correct it to your version b., remembering to add the required article before large amount.

with constructions like this:

I usually sit on the sofa watching television.
↓
I usually sit on the sofa and watch television.
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I know little about the present participle phrase.

 

[kadioguy]

Try:

I'm doing my best to understand. (Sorry if I'm beating a dead horse.)

No, you are not beating a dead horse, Tarheel. This reply helps me a lot.

 

[Tarheel]

No, you are not beating a dead horse, Tarheel. This reply helps me a lot.

I knew you'd say that. The suggestion was for you. I wasn't saying it myself.

 

[Tarheel]

I know little about the present participle phrase.

I forget more grammar terms every day that goes by.

 

[kadioguy]

I knew you'd say that. The suggestion was for you. I wasn't saying it myself.

I'm doing my best to understand. (Sorry if I'm beating a dead horse.)

Do you mean I can say the whole blue part in the end of post #13?

 

[Tarheel]

Yes, that was my suggestion. (We both know you have a tendency to overdo things.)