[General] anniversary greetings

[Anya_1313]

I need to write semi - official greetings for the company we are cooperating with. It would be a big shame for me, if i make the mistake, so can someone check it, please?

On the occasion of the 20th Anniversary ​

of presence on the Bulgarian’s sky ​

the Aviation Service Company,​

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Best wishes,​

Thanks in advance for help

 

[BobK]

All OK, except the second line: 'presence in Bulgaria's [no N] skies'. "Sky" would be OK, but I think the plural would sound better.

"On the occasion of" doesn't sound very warm, but it's OK; I'd prefer something like 'Celebrating' or 'In celebration of' or 'To celebrate'. Or even, maybe, 'Marking' - but that sounds a bit cold too. :hi: ;-)

b

 

[Anya_1313]

Thanks a looot for such a comprehensive response

 

[BobK]

:up: One point I missed: the second line needs another 'of': 'the anniversary of...the presence of'.

b

 

[birdeen's call]

Wait a minute... I think there's a misunderstanding here. Is it the Aviation Service Company that is present in Bulgaria's skies? This sentence seems to be translated word for word from Polish, that's why I'm asking...

PS: Oh, sorry BobK.

 

[Anya_1313]

Yes, Aviation Service Company is present in Bulgaria's skies for 20 years already It's an aerial company. And yes, this is quite word for word translated from polish, but i have no idea, how to write such greetings in English (form, vocabulary etc.) I wanted this greetings to be more unusual than just 'congratulations about your 20th anniversary'. If it's not acceptable in English, i'm open for other suggestions, of course.