Erasmus Mundus Scholarship Motivation Letter

[OsatoOsazuwa]

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[teechar]

The letter you wrote is too long! No one has the time to read all that. I suggest you reduce it to around half that size (700-800 words max). Focus on facts, figures, and specifics. Avoid waffle and rambling off-topic stuff. Start with "I wish to express my interest in applying for ...".
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[Tarheel]

I have a question. Is "business entity" a phrase you had seen before, or did you decide that yourself? (An American would say "company".)

If your idea is to write a novel then I think you should start off with something that would grab the reader's interest more. (It seems like you are trying to write a novel.)

I suggest that you look at things from the point of view of the person who is going to read that. What do you want that person to know about you?