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Here is my final draft for my son's yearbook. Would you please read and edit where needed. I'm not sure that English language is proper. Thanks a million.
Andrew Frosini
Throughout the years, Andrew, I’ve always been so proud of you and impressed with all the effort you’ve put into doing your best. Your hard work, dedication and patience have brought many wonderful and exciting experiences and accomplishments; you should be proud of yourself.
You’ve ( or You grew) grown (to be a ) into a fine, young man with such kindness and compassion (for or toward) others (omit - that any mother would want in a son or would be proud of ) and I've been truly blessed to have you as my son.
(or this sentence .. I've (when do you spell out - I have )watched you grow into a fine young man with such kindness and compassion (toward or for others (omit... that any mother would want in a son.... or any mother would be proud of ...or keep it. ) ( ... and I've been truly blessed to have you as my son. (to have a son like you)
(Which sentence do you like? I would love your thoughts.)
Always believe in yourself, the way I believe in you.
Love always ~ Mom
Congratulations, you deserve all the best.
Your Brother ~ Nick
Andrew Frosini
Throughout the years, Andrew, I’ve always been so proud of you and impressed with all the effort you’ve put into doing your best. Your hard work, dedication and patience have brought many wonderful and exciting experiences and accomplishments; you should be proud of yourself.
You’ve ( or You grew) grown (to be a ) into a fine, young man with such kindness and compassion (for or toward) others (omit - that any mother would want in a son or would be proud of ) and I've been truly blessed to have you as my son.
(or this sentence .. I've (when do you spell out - I have )watched you grow into a fine young man with such kindness and compassion (toward or for others (omit... that any mother would want in a son.... or any mother would be proud of ...or keep it. ) ( ... and I've been truly blessed to have you as my son. (to have a son like you)
(Which sentence do you like? I would love your thoughts.)
Always believe in yourself, the way I believe in you.
Love always ~ Mom
Congratulations, you deserve all the best.
Your Brother ~ Nick
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