[General] happy-go-lucky

contiluo

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Please help me make the paragraphs below sound natural. Thanks a lot.

In my elementary school life, I didn’t need to take the mock exams. It doesn’t make sense to me that why I have to spend so much time studying hard for numerous exams since I entered junior high school, even during summer and winter vacation. As a result, I don’t have time to have fun with friends and my family.

Therefore, I love the days when I was an elementary school student because it was the happy-go-lucky time in my life. Being an elementary school student, I didn’t feel any tremendous schoolwork pressure at all, so I could engage in activities that I found personally meaningful during that time. If it’s possible, I would rather go back to my elementary school life. Thus, I can regain the joy of being an elementary school student.
 

emsr2d2

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Are you asking us to do your work for you again?
 

contiluo

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No, I've revised the two paragraphs which are originally written by a junior student. However, I'm not sure if my revision sounds natural or there are some errors because I'm an ESL teacher. Therefore, I need native English speaker teachers to give me a correction.
 

emsr2d2

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That's exactly what I meant by asking us to do your work for you. You are the teacher. You are being paid to teach these students and to correct their work. I assume that when you were hired as an ESL teacher, you didn't tell your employer that actually you would be getting strangers on a forum to make those corrections - on an unpaid basis!
 

contiluo

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Honestly speaking, I tell the truth to my boss, supervisor, and colleagues that I get on the forum to ask for those corrections. In fact, one of my colleagues also often asks for corrections in this forum. As English is a foreign language for me, it is still beyond my reach to write a natural, idiomatic English sentences or paragraphs. Therefore, I often ask for corrections in this forum partly because it helps me sharpen my writing skills, but majorly benefits my students.
 
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