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Hello can you check my essay please:

The first chart describe why some people cycling to work, the second one describe why others prefer driving to work.

Therese 2 main reason for way people prefer ride bicycle for 30%, first is health and fitness the second is that a bicycle is less pollution than a car, while 15% of theme prefer bicycle for it parking facility, the other 13% said that bicycle doesn’t need any cost and surprisingly the last 12% considered that cycling is faster than driving.

In the other hand, the major reason for driving to work is the comfort for 40%, while 21% of people said that they prefer driving to work because of long distance, the other reason is that a car is faster than a bicycle to 14%, a similar percent said that they need to carry things to work, and lastly 11% considered the driving safer than cycling.

In general the major people prefer driving a car to work its comfort, while the main reason for cycling to work is healthy and environmental.

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Hello, can you check my essay please?

The first chart describes why some people cycle [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] to work, while the second one [STRIKE]describe why[/STRIKE] outlines the reasons others prefer driving. [STRIKE]to work.[/STRIKE]

The [STRIKE]rese 2[/STRIKE] two main reasons [STRIKE]for way[/STRIKE] given by people who prefer to ride a bicycle to work were [STRIKE]for 30%, first is[/STRIKE] health and fitness, [STRIKE]the second is that a bicycle is[/STRIKE] and less pollution. Each accounted for 30%. [STRIKE]than a car,[/STRIKE] Meanwhile, 15% [STRIKE]of theme[/STRIKE] said they prefer a bicycle because it's easier to park. [STRIKE]for it parking facility, the[/STRIKE] Another 13% said that using a bicycle doesn’t [STRIKE]need[/STRIKE] incur any cost, and surprisingly, [STRIKE]the last[/STRIKE] 12% considered [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] cycling [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] faster than driving.

[STRIKE] In[/STRIKE] On the other hand, the major reason for driving to work [STRIKE]is the[/STRIKE] was comfort for 40%, while 21% [STRIKE]of people[/STRIKE] said that they prefer driving to work because of the long distances involved. Moreover, 14% gave speed as [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] another reason for preferring to drive. [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] They pointed out that a car is faster than a bicycle. [STRIKE]to 14%,[/STRIKE] A similar percentage said that they need to carry things to work, and lastly, 11% considered [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] driving safer than cycling.

In general, the major reason people prefer driving a car to work [STRIKE]its[/STRIKE] is comfort, while the main reason for cycling to work is related to health and the environment.

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