[Essay] helped ashore

[contiluo]

Please have a look at the paragraph. Thanks for your kindness!

Last Sunday afternoon, while I was walking along a river bank, a boy was swimming in the river in the sunshine. I originally thought that he was just frolicking in the water, but he was sinking. He shouted loudly for help, so I immediately plunged down the river to save him. When he was helped ashore, I told him, “Don’t you see the sign ‘No Swimming’ over here?” “Sorry, I didn’t notice it,” he answered. After my blame for his fault, he promised to be more careful and would never do it again.

 

[MikeNewYork]

I would change "down the river" to "into the river".

 

[teechar]

I would also change "Don't you see" to "Didn't you see."

 

[MikeNewYork]

If he could still see the sign, "don't is fine".

 

[emsr2d2]

I would use "Didn't you see the sign?" because it really doesn't matter if he can see it now. The question logically queries whether he saw it before he decided to jump in the river.

 

[contiluo]

In the sentence, "When he was helped ashore,...", is the phrase "be helped ashore" correct?

 

[MikeNewYork]

I'm not sure what you are asking. The phrase in the sentence is "was helped ashore". That phrase is correct.