rodgers white
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- Joined
- Jan 17, 2016
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- English Teacher
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- Chinese
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- China
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- China
Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.
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Gan headed slowly towards the exit, not being in a hurry to meet the bears. Outside, Lili heard a change in bear vocalisations and knew they were not happy, and she was now positive that they had discovered Gan, but there was no rage in their voices. The bear cub let out a long whine and then suddenly the bears exited the cave. Lili nocked an arrow, and then Gan came out of the cave with his smoking torch, the bears kept running. Lili walked down towards Gan, who was coughing a little. “Is that the shirt your wife made for your birthday last week?”
Gan nodded. “Do you think she’ll notice? Maybe it’ll look better after I wash it.”
Lili took the shirt off of the torch and held it up. “Well, the soot might come out, but this hole isn't going anywhere. You could try turning it into a pocket.”
Before heading back to the village, Lili hung the shirt on a stick and put it in the entrance of the cave. “That might deter the bears from going back inside for a little while at least. What will you tell Jingying?”
Gan smiled. “That the shirt she made for me saved my life.” They both laughed.
Gan explained to Jingying the series of events that led to his shirt’s demise. “Gan, if you didn’t like the shirt I worked so hard on, you should have just said so. There’s no reason to make up such an elaborate story. You could have at least burnt it a little and showed it to me rather than just throwing it away.”
Gan open his mouth to defend himself but couldn’t get a word out. Then both Lili and Jingying burst out laughing.
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Gan headed slowly towards the exit, not being in a hurry to meet the bears. Outside, Lili heard a change in bear vocalisations and knew they were not happy, and she was now positive that they had discovered Gan, but there was no rage in their voices. The bear cub let out a long whine and then suddenly the bears exited the cave. Lili nocked an arrow, and then Gan came out of the cave with his smoking torch, the bears kept running. Lili walked down towards Gan, who was coughing a little. “Is that the shirt your wife made for your birthday last week?”
Gan nodded. “Do you think she’ll notice? Maybe it’ll look better after I wash it.”
Lili took the shirt off of the torch and held it up. “Well, the soot might come out, but this hole isn't going anywhere. You could try turning it into a pocket.”
Before heading back to the village, Lili hung the shirt on a stick and put it in the entrance of the cave. “That might deter the bears from going back inside for a little while at least. What will you tell Jingying?”
Gan smiled. “That the shirt she made for me saved my life.” They both laughed.
Gan explained to Jingying the series of events that led to his shirt’s demise. “Gan, if you didn’t like the shirt I worked so hard on, you should have just said so. There’s no reason to make up such an elaborate story. You could have at least burnt it a little and showed it to me rather than just throwing it away.”
Gan open his mouth to defend himself but couldn’t get a word out. Then both Lili and Jingying burst out laughing.
