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I have written this essay for practice for my CAE exam. I would like it if it was checked.
” Your class has been watching a TV debate about measures that could improve people’s health and well-being in modern society. You have made the notes below:
Measures to improve health and well-being
-Advertising
-Education
- Laws
Write an essay discusing two of the measures and explain which one is the most effective”.
MEASURES TO IMPROVE OUR WELFARE
Nowadays’ society is claimed to be going downhill in numerous aspects. Nevertheless, it is respected for our concern towards healthy lifestyles and how to do our utmost to focus on our well-being. This essay takes a look at measures that could give us a helping hand with this glaringly unresolved issue.
First and foremost, education plays a crucial role. From parents to teachers, their responsability is to instill appropriate manners from a young age. It is common knowledge these habits adquired during our upbringing linger on in our lives. Consequently, the most effective way to achieve this is by parents embodying what it is to be healthy and by schools encouraging -not forcing- pupils and teenagers to read about the topic. The former motivates them to follow suit and the latter boosts their curiosity towards reading insights regarding exercise, sleep and self-awareness.
Furthermore, it is often questioned whether laws should come into effect making it compulsory to remain cognizant of the importance of health and to out it into practice. Many argue this is not the right way, because it would be complicated to regulate it- would we be punished for procrastinating and fined for not doing any sport? Is it not preferable to honor who does as opposed to harming financially who does not?
After considering both viewpoints, I have come to the conclusion that the key to a society which incorporates self-care into its daily life is by stimulation, not force. It stands to reason the number of people suffering from illnesses such as obesity and anxiety will be reduced.
” Your class has been watching a TV debate about measures that could improve people’s health and well-being in modern society. You have made the notes below:
Measures to improve health and well-being
-Advertising
-Education
- Laws
Write an essay discusing two of the measures and explain which one is the most effective”.
MEASURES TO IMPROVE OUR WELFARE
Nowadays’ society is claimed to be going downhill in numerous aspects. Nevertheless, it is respected for our concern towards healthy lifestyles and how to do our utmost to focus on our well-being. This essay takes a look at measures that could give us a helping hand with this glaringly unresolved issue.
First and foremost, education plays a crucial role. From parents to teachers, their responsability is to instill appropriate manners from a young age. It is common knowledge these habits adquired during our upbringing linger on in our lives. Consequently, the most effective way to achieve this is by parents embodying what it is to be healthy and by schools encouraging -not forcing- pupils and teenagers to read about the topic. The former motivates them to follow suit and the latter boosts their curiosity towards reading insights regarding exercise, sleep and self-awareness.
Furthermore, it is often questioned whether laws should come into effect making it compulsory to remain cognizant of the importance of health and to out it into practice. Many argue this is not the right way, because it would be complicated to regulate it- would we be punished for procrastinating and fined for not doing any sport? Is it not preferable to honor who does as opposed to harming financially who does not?
After considering both viewpoints, I have come to the conclusion that the key to a society which incorporates self-care into its daily life is by stimulation, not force. It stands to reason the number of people suffering from illnesses such as obesity and anxiety will be reduced.