Music is the manifestation of deep human feelings

[alpacinou]

Hello everyone,

I want to suggest that music is something that shows deep human emotions. It also exhibits cultural features of different peoples.
I have written this sentence:

Music is the manifestation of deep human feelings and incorporates many of our cultural characteristics.

Does it work and how can I make it better? I have doubts about the underlined parts.

 

[Tarheel]

Music is a way people express themselves. It makes people feel all kinds of things.

Music makes you happy. Music makes you sad. Music makes you feel good. Music makes you feel bad.

 

[tedmc]

Music is an art form to express (not manifest) human feelings and emotions. It is also a manifestation of cultural characteristics.

 

[alpacinou]

Thanks folks.

I need to use "manifestation" and "incorporate" in this context.

 

[Rover_KE]

I seem to remember that you've emphasised before that you need to use such and such.

Why is that?

 

[alpacinou]

I seem to remember that you've emphasised before that you need to use such and such.

Why is that?

Sometimes, if I use new vocabularies in the context of the subject of my class, students remember it better. In this case, we already worked on those two words. Now the context of the new lesson is music. If I can use them correctly in the new context and repeat them, that really works.

 

[GoesStation]

… new vocabulary …. It's not countable in this context.

 

[alpacinou]

… new vocabulary …. It's not countable in this context.

Thanks for pointing that out.

So how do you think "manifestation" and "incorporate" can be used in this context?

 

[GoesStation]

Music is the manifestation of deep human feelings and incorporates many of our cultural characteristics.

So how do you think "manifestation" and "incorporate" can be used in this context?

The sentence I quoted above is passable. Music is but one such manifestation, though, so I'd soften it by using the indefinite article.

 

[alpacinou]

The sentence I quoted above is passable. Music is but one such manifestation, though, so I'd soften it by using the indefinite article.

Is there a way I can turn it from passable to a good sentence?

Music is one of manifestations of deep human emotions and people also try to incorporate many of their cultural characteristics in their music.

 

[GoesStation]

Is there a way I can turn it from passable to a good sentence?

Music is one of manifestations ….

I highlighted an error. You can easily correct it, but I wonder why you don't just say a manifestation.

 

[alpacinou]

I highlighted an error. You can easily correct it, but I wonder why you don't just say a manifestation.

Thanks. Would you say this is a good sentence or a barely acceptable sentence?

Music is a manifestation of deep human emotions and people also try to incorporate many of their cultural characteristics in their music.

 

[Tarheel]

It's probably just me, but there are words I call everyday words, and then there are the rest of them. What's an everyday word? I'm glad you asked. It's a word you are very likely to come across, so you should learn it. The word music is an everyday word. The word manifest? Well, if you're trying to learn every word in the dictionary then I would learn that one.

 

[alpacinou]

Thanks. But the question still stands. Would you say this is a good sentence or a barely acceptable sentence?

Music is a manifestation of deep human emotions and people also try to incorporate many of their cultural characteristics in their music.

 

[Tarheel]

It's okay for learning new words. Except I wouldn't try for three new ones in the same sentence.

(My opinion.)

 

[GoesStation]

Thanks. Would you say this is a good sentence or a barely acceptable sentence?

Music is a manifestation of deep human emotions and people also try to incorporate many of their cultural characteristics in their music.

It's two sentences mashed together. Your original sentence was closer to what I think you're after.

 

[alpacinou]

It's two sentences mashed together. Your original sentence was closer to what I think you're after.

Thanks. Are you saying 1 is better than 2?

1. Music is a manifestation of deep human feelings and incorporates many of our cultural characteristics.

2. Music is a manifestation of deep human emotions and people also try to incorporate many of their cultural characteristics in their music.

Honestly, since you said it is merely passable, I intend to turn it into a better sentence.

 

[Tarheel]

I wouldn't say they try to do that (make the music reflect their culture). I think it just happens naturally.

 

[tedmc]

I wouldn't say they try to do that (make the music reflect their culture). I think it just happens naturally.

I think it can happen both ways - cultural characteristics being incorporated into music consciously or unconsciously.

 

[alpacinou]

Thanks everybody.

I guess I will go with this:

2. Music is a manifestation of deep human emotions and people also incorporate many of their cultural characteristics in their music.