[Essay] our real role in the life

TurkiTaya

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Can you correct my article ?

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our real role in the life


our attend in this world it’s not for uselessly , the people they should know what it’s him role to the this world , and develop all about that .

So , what is our role in the life? .. it’s simple , and very beauty , our role it’s the believe with ourselves before every thing , because that is foundation stone .
then , help the people if necessary , and communicate to them . this is healthy life .

third , studying children about the values and ethics , and put high curriculum with fun .
fourth , we must care to our planet , and do it hard work. Love the life and humans it’s nice feeling .

Finally , the believe to hard working and the insistence to the successful and love this world and humans , will produces to the world Decent life . This is our role to the our llife .
 
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Raymott

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Do they not teach you to punctuate in English? It's not optional in real English, no matter what you might see on the web.
Every sentence must start with a capital letter. You don't put a space before a comma or a period. Two dots is not a punctuation mark.
You should fix all these first.
 

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Hello TurkiTaya, and welcome to the forum. :)

Can you correct my article please?

Our Real Role in [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] Life

Our [STRIKE]attend[/STRIKE] purpose in this world [STRIKE]it’s[/STRIKE] is not trivial. [STRIKE]for uselessly , the[/STRIKE] People [STRIKE]they[/STRIKE] should know what [STRIKE]it’s him[/STRIKE] their role [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] is in the this world and live their lives according to that. [STRIKE]develop all about that .[/STRIKE]

So, what is our role in [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] life? It’s simple, and very beautiful. Our role [STRIKE]it’s the[/STRIKE] is to believe [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] in ourselves before [STRIKE]every thing[/STRIKE] anything else, because that is the foundation stone for a fulfilled life.

[STRIKE]then ,[/STRIKE] After that, our role in life is to help [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] other people in their hour of need. [STRIKE]if necessary , and communicate to them .[/STRIKE] This is how to live a [STRIKE]healthy[/STRIKE] meaningful life.

Third, our goals should include [STRIKE]studying[/STRIKE] teaching children [STRIKE]about the[/STRIKE] good values and ethics, and [STRIKE]put high[/STRIKE] ensuring educational curricula are high quality [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] but fun at the same time.

Fourth, we must care [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] about our planet and [STRIKE]do it[/STRIKE] and put in all the effort and hard work to conserve the natural environment. Love [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] life and [STRIKE]humans[/STRIKE] people; it’s a nice feeling.

Finally, [STRIKE]the believe to[/STRIKE] hard work, the endeavour to succeed [STRIKE]ing and the insistence to the successful[/STRIKE] and love of this world and its people [STRIKE]humans ,[/STRIKE] will [STRIKE]produces to the world[/STRIKE] ensure everyone has a decent life. This is our role [STRIKE]to the our[/STRIKE] in life.
 
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