[Grammar] regular pattern

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Ashiuhto

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Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!

Sleeping time has to be in a regular pattern. To improve sleep obstacle, it is important to cultivate a good daily habit. Sleep time has to be fixed, even if you don’t have a good sleep the day before, you still have to wake up at the fixed time, in order not to affect your sleep in the coming night.
 

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fixed time

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Sleep time has to be fixed, even if you don’t have a good sleep the day before, you still have to wake up at the fixed time, in order not to affect your sleep in the coming night.
 

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Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!

Sleeping time has to be in a regular pattern. To improve sleep [STRIKE]obstacle[/STRIKE], it is important to cultivate a good daily habit. Sleep time has to be fixed. Even if you don’t have a good sleep the day before, you still have to wake up at the fixed time, in order not to affect your sleep in the coming night.

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trouble shooting

How to express the idea as written?
If we want to have a good sleeping quality, we should go to bed at regular time and get enough sleeping hours. For instance, we usually go to bed at 10 o'clock every night and never stay up late or all night. Besides, we should at least get 8 hours in our sleep a day. Furthermore, we should make it a good habit to go to bed early and get up early. Therefore, we are supposed to get rid of insomnia. Is the following wording acceptable? Please give me a correction.
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Re: trouble shooting

How to express the idea as written?
If we want to have a good sleeping quality, we should go to bed at regular time and get enough sleeping hours. For instance, we usually go to bed at 10 o'clock every night and never stay up late or all night. Besides, we should at least get 8 hours in our sleep a day. Furthermore, we should make it a good habit to go to bed early and get up early. Therefore, we are supposed to get rid of insomnia. Is the following wording acceptable? Please give me a correction.
Sleeping time has to be in a regular pattern. To improve sleep obstacle (Why would you want to improve an obstacle? Research the meaning of this word), it is important to cultivate a good daily habit. Sleep time has to be fixed, even if you [STRIKE]don’t[/STRIKE] didn't have a good sleep the [STRIKE]day [/STRIKE]night before, you still have to wake up at [STRIKE]the [/STRIKE] a fixed time, in order not to affect your sleep in the coming night.
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I have merged these three threads as they contained almost the same sentences, with two of them having additional sentences. However, it was going to get confusing to have three threads with the sentence about "even if you didn't have a good sleep the night before" - two different users had already offered their corrections, so they are now shown in this one thread.
 

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Ashiuhto, it is normally a good idea to post short passages for correction/comment. If you post a long passage, it may well not receive a response. Few of us have the time or desire to spend a lot of time on this type of work.

However, even after ems's merging of three threads, you still have a lot of threads going on your writing about insomnia. Could you please, from now on, post whole paragraphs in the Editing & Writing Topics forum, leaving the 'Ask a Teacher' forum free for more specific questions about grammar and lexis? Thank you.
 

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I agree.

And when you finally submit your thesis on insomnia, please remember to acknowledge the help you have received from Using English.

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