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[emsr2d2]

Thanks to for your corrections.

It's getting a little tiresome to keep reminding you to end a sentence with a full stop.

and Also, I wonder if you could give me the mark that I would get for my writing task 1.
Tell me the things that I need to improve as well, please.

You need to improve your use of punctuation and capitalisation. You must always capitalise the word "I" (first person singular pronoun). Always write in complete sentences.