[Grammar] we provided some local activities and wins from October, as follows:

[Volodymyr]

We provided some local activities and wins from October, as follows:

 

[emsr2d2]

Do you have a question for us?

 

[Volodymyr]

Have I broken some rules of the forum?

 

[teechar]

No, you haven't, but what would you like to know about the sentence you posted above?

 

[Volodymyr]

I wanted to be sure that my post is correct.

The originaly post was, as follows:

Our company provided some local activities and wins from October, as follows:


-Increased customer visits as COVID restrictions are dialed back
-Working with marketing automation systems
-Tenders won
-Executing virtual seminars with customers

 

[teechar]

What do you mean by "provided", and who did your company provide these things to?

 

[Volodymyr]

I mean that our company did some local activities with our customers and end users.

 

[teechar]

OK, and how about the "wins"? Do you mean "successes" or "achievements" perhaps?
I strongly suggest that you reword the whole sentence.

 

[Volodymyr]

"Wins" means achievements as well as some successes.

 

[tedmc]

Provide is not the word to use. You do not provide wins. You organize activities and gain achievements. I think you should list down the two separately.

 

[emsr2d2]

I think you should list [STRIKE]down[/STRIKE] the two separately.

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