What childhood means for me

[Marianmr]

Childhood

Childhood means to me some bittersweets experiences. When I was four years old my father was murdered. After that, my mother, brother and I moved to Ecuador but we didn’t spend a lot of time there for disagreeable happenings and we went back. I had a lot of friend here, I remember myself making a pair of binoculars with toilet roll tube and hearing my brother telling me “that’s awesome”.
Once I was playing blind man’s buff with my neighbors I end up injured. I hated when my mother told me “its 7 p.m. get in” but I moved and didn’t have friend anymore. My mother converted to Christianity since then she always told me “be careful with the friendships”.

 

[Tarheel]

That needs a lot of work.

Perhaps:

When I was four years old my father was murdered. After that, my mother, brother and I moved to Ecuador.


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[Nancy Nguyen]

"When I was four years old my father was murdered"

I think it must be has a commas:

When I was four years old, my father was murdered.

 

[Tarheel]

Mirianmr:

Space between paragraphs. Make more, shorter sentences.​

I am not supposed to do your homework.

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Nancy, you picked one of his best sentences to fix. Also, it should be: "I think that sentence needs a comma."

 

[Tarheel]

Nancy, are you Vietnamese? (I met somebody from Vietnam once.)