Writing: connectors of sequence

[Winwin2011]

If we use the connectors of sequence to order events, is the following order correct.

First, next, then, after that, next, then, after that, next, finally.

If we use sequence connectors to show the sequence of events in a compositon or a report of an event (more than ten events), which of the following expressions do you prefer?

1. First, next, then, after that, next, then, after that, next, after that, then, next, finally.

2. First, second, third, fourth, fifth, sixth, seventh, eighth, ninth, tenth, eleventh, finally.

 

[MikeNewYork]

If I had a string that long, I would tend to number them in a list: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, etc. Your first suggestion becomes tedious after the second "then".

 

[Winwin2011]

If we use the connectors of sequence to order events, is the following order correct.

First, next, then, after that, next, then, after that, next, finally.

 

[MikeNewYork]

It is still tedious.

 

[Winwin2011]

If I had a string that long, I would tend to number them in a list: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, etc. Your first suggestion becomes tedious after the second "then".

Thanks Mike

Do you mean First, second, third, fourth, fifth, etc.?

 

[MikeNewYork]

That is less tedious. But I would use numbers in a list.