A winter morning....

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A winter morning is misty and cold. There is dense fog everywhere. Sometimes the fog is so dense that the sun rays can't get through it. Even things at a little distance can hardly be seen. Bird's chirping isn't heard. The cow and other animals can't come out. But it's not so in every morning. Dew drops fall on leaves and blades of grass at night. They look like glittering pearls when the rays of the morning sun fall on them. Village children and people have hardly warm clothes. They gather straw and dry leaves to make fire to warm themselves. The old and the poor bask in the sun in order to warm themselves. People in general and children get up late. So everyone is busy in taking breakfast, dressing and getting ready for going to their respective places. In a winter morning, one can enjoy delicious and sweet cakes, pias of Date juice and many other things. The scene of the winter morning vanishes as the day advances. The sun goes up and the fog melts. A winter morning is enjoyable in many respects.
 

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A winter's morning here is misty and cold. There is dense fog everywhere. Sometimes, the fog is so dense that the sun's rays can't get through (it). Visibility can be so poor that even things [STRIKE]at[/STRIKE] a little [STRIKE]distance[/STRIKE] far away can hardly be seen. [STRIKE]Bird's chirping[/STRIKE] Also, birdsong isn't heard. [STRIKE]The[/STRIKE] Cows and other animals can't come out. But [STRIKE]it's[/STRIKE] that's not [STRIKE]so in[/STRIKE] the case every morning. Dew drops fall on leaves and blades of grass at night. They look like glittering pearls when the rays of the morning sun fall on them. Village children and people have hardly warm clothes. They gather straw and dry leaves to make fires to warm themselves. The old and the poor bask in the sun in order to warm themselves. People in general and children get up late. So everyone is busy [STRIKE]in taking[/STRIKE] eating breakfast, [STRIKE]dressing and[/STRIKE] getting dressed and ready to go to work or school. [STRIKE]for going to their respective places. In[/STRIKE] On a winter's morning here, one can enjoy delicious and sweet cakes, pias of date juice and many other things. The scene of the winter morning vanishes as the day advances. The sun goes up and the fog lifts. [STRIKE]melts.[/STRIKE] A winter's morning here is enjoyable in many respects.
I don't understand the underlined parts.
 

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A winter morning is misty and cold. There is dense fog everywhere. Sometimes the fog is so dense that the sun rays can't get through it. Even things at a little distance can hardly be seen. Bird's chirping isn't heard. The cow and other animals can't come out.

What cow? What animals? Come out of where?

The way it starts you seem to be talking about a specific winter morning. Then everything changes.

You can forget about the third sentence altogether.

Try:

The chirping of birds cannot be heard. (Fog doesn't do that. It does not suppress sound.)

(Cross posted.)
 

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Dew drops fall on leaves and blades of grass at night.

That's fine grammatically
 

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Dewdrop is one word.
 

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Dew drops fall on leaves and blades of grass at night.

That's fine grammatically

You mean that's not the way dew forms, don't you?
 
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