Agents under cover

[motico]

Please, check if the following passage is grammatically correct. Thanks!

However, the Turks' greatest fear is that demonstrations in Syria, in which Kurds are taking part, might escalate into clashes which might cause those Kurds to flee to Turkey. It is common knowledge that the Turks hate the Kurds and have no interest in increasing their number in Turkey. Last week the Turkish intelligence received intelligence information that Syria had sent some agents under cover of refugees to those camps in Turkey, in order to detect the refugees' deeds and conversations and thus find an excuse to settle the account with them once they return to Syria. If it turns out that the Syrian intelligence is working without permission on Turkish soil, it will be considered a slap on Erdogan's cheek. ​

 

[5jj]

I have made a few minor suggestions.

However, the Turks' greatest fear is that demonstrations in Syria, in which Kurds are taking part, might escalate into clashes which might cause those Kurds to flee to Turkey. It is common knowledge that the Turks hate the Kurds and have no interest in increasing their number in Turkey. Last week, [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] Turkish intelligence received (intelligence) information that Syria had sent some agents under cover of refugees to [STRIKE]those[/STRIKE]* camps in Turkey, in order to detect the refugees' deeds and conversations, and thus find an excuse to settle the account with them once they return to Syria. If it turns out that [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] Syrian intelligence is working without permission on Turkish soil, it will be considered a slap on Erdogan's cheek.

* If you have already mentioned certain camps, then 'those' is fine.

 

[allenman]

under cover as refugees to those camps

under cover of sounds wrong to my ear. I perhaps would have used "sent undercover agents as refugees"

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