mrmvp
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Hello.
This is one of the IELTS questions on the internet.
Although many people value their public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?
I wrote the introduction. I am neutral. In other words, I don't lean to a side. The first part in bold is paraphrasing the question. The sentence in italic is the thesis statement in which I state my opinion.The underlined sentence is the outline in which I will write the two main body paragraphs.
Deciding to protect green spaces or building residential areas for new generation or opting for expanding business and enhancing economics is a critical decision in today's world. I somewhat disagree with the statement. Public parks are perfect place to enjoy nature and exercising, residential areas and given priority to boost business and business entrepreneurs and investors.
Are there any mistakes?
If you have advise to improve the introduction, please write.
This is one of the IELTS questions on the internet.
Although many people value their public parks, this space could be better used for other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and boost economies.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?
I wrote the introduction. I am neutral. In other words, I don't lean to a side. The first part in bold is paraphrasing the question. The sentence in italic is the thesis statement in which I state my opinion.The underlined sentence is the outline in which I will write the two main body paragraphs.
Deciding to protect green spaces or building residential areas for new generation or opting for expanding business and enhancing economics is a critical decision in today's world. I somewhat disagree with the statement. Public parks are perfect place to enjoy nature and exercising, residential areas and given priority to boost business and business entrepreneurs and investors.
Are there any mistakes?
If you have advise to improve the introduction, please write.