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I wrote down the following short paragraph in 2012 because I wanted to learn something about different nuts. I don't think it was corrected, however. Is it natural and grammatical?
Fresh chestnut fruits have about 180 calories per 100 grams of edible parts, which is much lower than walnuts, almonds, other nuts and dried fruit. Chestnuts, as with all plant foods, contain no cholesterol and contain very little fat, mostly unsaturated, and no gluten.
a) I think I need to add an "and" before "other nuts".
b) I think "dried fruit" should be "dried fruits".
c) I think "as with all plant foods" is ambiguous here. Does it refer to "all the plant foods" or "edible foods that can be eaten totally"? Such as the "celery", etc. The whole part of it can be eaten, both the stalk and leaves.
d) I think it's redundant to use "contain" here.
Fresh chestnut fruits have about 180 calories per 100 grams of edible parts, which is much lower than walnuts, almonds, other nuts and dried fruit. Chestnuts, as with all plant foods, contain no cholesterol and contain very little fat, mostly unsaturated, and no gluten.
a) I think I need to add an "and" before "other nuts".
b) I think "dried fruit" should be "dried fruits".
c) I think "as with all plant foods" is ambiguous here. Does it refer to "all the plant foods" or "edible foods that can be eaten totally"? Such as the "celery", etc. The whole part of it can be eaten, both the stalk and leaves.
d) I think it's redundant to use "contain" here.