[General] History of Karbala

[Tarheel]

Say:

Sometimes we go to a place where others' beliefs are different from ours.

And:

We may be scoffed at and even taunted.

(I am not sure about "scoffed at" there.)

 

[Narkises]

Hi Tarheel,
Thank you. I've sent the previous part to our revision group. Now, I'm working on a new part. The new part started from post #36. If you want to help me, please focus on the new part. I don't know how I should thank you. :B-fly:

 

[Tarheel]

I am not sure what or where the revision group is. Anyhow, I suspect that "scoffed at" is not used much anymore. (I could be wrong.)

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

our daily lives

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

seek a way to make up for it

 

[Tarheel]

Orations and speeches are two things that are the same thing.

 

[Tarheel]

Lo people! The one who knows me, knows me. And for the one who does not know me, I am Ali - Son of Hussain(AS)- . Hussain is the person whose holly head was chopped off near the Euphrates river. However, he was not guilty and they did not have right to do that. I am the son of that person who ... (( I want to use "irreverence" but I dont know how))

Say:

He was not guilty of any crime.

(holy head)

 

[Tarheel]

You could use "irreverence" like this:

He disapproved of their irreverence.

(There are other possibilities, of course.)

 

[Tarheel]

His calmness was stolen; his wealth was despoiled; and his family members were captured. I am the son of that man who was beleaguered by excess of enemies. He was alone; There was no friend to help him and to break the beleaguer. He was martyred alone. However, this kind of martyrdom is our honor (( I dont know how to say it, it is like feeling proud of or....))

Perhaps:

His calmness was shattered. His treasure was stolen. And his family members were captured. I am the son of that man who was beleaguered by an excess of enemies. He was alone. He had no friend to help him. He was martyred alone. However, that kind of martyrdom is our honor.

 

[Narkises]

Perhaps:

His calmness was shattered. His treasure was stolen. And his family members were captured. I am the son of that man who was beleaguered by an excess of enemies. He was alone. He had no friend to help him. He was martyred alone. However, that kind of martyrdom is our honor.

You changed "There was no friend to help him" to "he had no friend".
Well, He surly had some loyal friends, but all of them were killed before Hussain. Hussain was the last one who was beleaguered.

 

[Tarheel]

Don't the two things mean the same thing?

 

[Narkises]

Well, when we say: "he had no friend", we focus on "HAD". He did have friends, but they were killed before him.
Do you see any mistakes in my own sentence?

 

[Tarheel]

No, I didn't find any more mistakes.