I need help

[Pleasehelpme!]

I need to know if this description of my business is written correctly (comma placements are right) and sounds good.- we are a family owned painting business with over twentie years of experience that specialize in both interior and exterior painting. Any advice on making this a better description would be greatly appreciated.

 

[Tdol]

I would use family-owned and twenty.

 

[tedmc]

The way you have described could mean that you do painting of the walls of buildings as in one of the trades in building construction.
Or do you deal with paintings of art?

OK, I notice you stated "painting" as singular, so I presume you are in the painting trade in construction. As far as I know, all painters do painting of the interior and exterior of buildings. It is the types and scale of buildings that they specialize in i.e. whether they are residential, commercial, highrise, etc.

 

[Matthew Wai]

I would use 'specializing' instead of 'that specialize' because 'that' refers to 'experience', but I am not a teacher.

 

[Pleasehelpme!]

We are a family-owned painting business with over twenty years of experience specializing in both interior and exterior painting. Does this look better? Also does it say a nuff ?

 

[Matthew Wai]

It's fine with me, but I am not a teacher.

Please note that a better title would have been 'we are a family owned painting business with over twentie years of experience'.

Extract from the Posting Guidelines:

'Thread titles should include all or part of the word/phrase being discussed.'

 

[tzfujimino]

Are you going to put it on a website or something?
To make your statement persuasive, you could use some pictures of what you did in the past.
Seeing is believing.

 

[Pleasehelpme!]

Should it be We are a family-owned painting business with over twenty years of experience, specializing in both interior and exterior painting. Or We are a family- owned painting business with over twenty years of experience specializing in both interior and exterior painting.

 

[tedmc]

The comma is optional.
Interior and exterior painting of?

 

[Rover_KE]

Also does it say [STRIKE]a nuff[/STRIKE] enough?

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[Matthew Wai]

The comma is optional.

I think it is not needed grammatically, but I am not a teacher.

 

[TheParser]

***** NOT A TEACHER *****

Hello, Please:

I am certainly not a copywriter, but I think that you want your advertisement to be as short as possible in order to grab people's attention.

Why is it necessary to use the word "painting" twice? Why is it necessary to use the word "over"? Why is it necessary to use the word "both"?

It is said that people nowadays don't have the patience to read long sentences. Because of social media (of which I know nothing!), people -- it is said -- want short sentences.

So maybe you should keep it short and sweet. Something like:

"For twenty years, our family-owned business has specialized in interior and exterior painting."

 

[tedmc]

All painters do interior and exterior painting, so I do not see the work as a specialization.

 

[Rover_KE]

No they don't! There is certainly some specialisation.

 

[Matthew Wai]

All painters do interior and exterior painting

I think a painter could be 'an artist who paints pictures', but I am not a teacher.
The bold text was quoted from http://www.macmillandictionary.com/dictionary/british/painter

 

[tedmc]

No they don't! There is certainly some specialisation.

What specialisation? Not when they say they do general interior and exterior painting (of buildings) which all painters do anyway. Unless it is the application of special finishes using different materials and methods of application. I am in the building industry.

 

[tedmc]

I think a painter could be 'an artist who paints pictures', but I am not a teacher.
The bold text was quoted from http://www.macmillandictionary.com/dictionary/british/painter

Not when OP is talking about interior and exterior painting.

 

[tzfujimino]

All painters do interior and exterior painting, so I do not see the work as a specialization.

I think there are some people who specialize in this:
https://www.google.co.jp/search?q=s...VChMI5I2NqMe1xwIVyI-UCh2i4AoR&biw=360&bih=511

I don't know what they're called in English, but I assume the OP won't do this kind of job.

What do you think?

 

[Eckaslike]

I would just call the person doing that "a car/vehicle paint sprayer".
http://www.indeed.co.uk/Car-Paint-Sprayer-jobs

No, the OP's family business won't be doing that. I imagine they'll be painting houses and offices.

 

[Pleasehelpme!]

How should I word it if I was to incorporate the fact that we do commercial and residential property?