I notice the rhythmic heart beating of my heart

[Freeguy]

Is this sentence natural and correct?

- I notice the rhythmic heart beating of my heart even I can imagine that beautiful girl.

 

[SoothingDave]

"The beating of my heart" not "heart beating of my heart." It's redundant.

I don't know what you mean by the end of your sentence "even I can imagine..."

 

[Freeguy]

I meant: The rhythmic beating of my hear. Sorry. That was a mistake.

 

[tzfujimino]

I meant: The rhythmic beating of my hear. Sorry. That was a mistake.

No. You meant 'the rhythmic beating of my heart'.:-D

... and what about the 'even I can imagine...' part? (Dave is asking you about this.)

:-D

 

[lotus888]

This may be just what might express your feelings. Though sad , it gives you a happy feeling .

The lyrics are very nice, and easy to read.

"... just the lonely beating of my heart."

All Alone Am I, by Brenda Lee
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Oji2YHjI7a4


This one has exquisite pictures of old movie stars.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JJHvYU_y6xQ


If you are a hopeless romantic, then you can say:

I felt the lonely beating of my heart, even as I imagined that beautiful girl.



--lotus