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Please help make the following paragraph natural and grammatical.

I recently talked to a woman on social media who turned out to be actually looking for a boyfriend for her daughter. While I had the intent to know more about her daughter, I was appalled by what she really wants. She kept asking me if I could earn 200,000 yuan per yuan and the state of my properties (how many apartments I have). I told her that she and her daughter could find an ideal person who could satisfy all their needs in the talented market and they should go find there.​
 
Please help make the following paragraph natural and grammatical.
I recently talked to a woman on social media who turned out to be actually looking for a boyfriend for her daughter. While I had the intent wanted to know more about her daughter, I was appalled by what she the woman really wants wanted. She kept asking me if I could have the potential to earn 200,000 yuan per yuan year, and the state of my properties (how many apartments I have) how much property I own. I told her I was sure that she and her daughter they could find an the ideal person man who could satisfy all their needs in the talented market and they should go find and look there.
See above. It would be an idea to explain what you thought you were talking to her about before it "turned out" that she was looking for a partner for her boyfriend.
I have no idea what the underlined phrase means.
 
It would be an idea to explain what you thought you were talking to her about before it "turned out" that she was looking for a partner for her boyfriend.
I have no idea what the underlined phrase means.
Much appreciated.

a) I think I'll leave out "turn out" because, on second thoughts, it doesn't make the sentence better.
b) I used "talented market" to mean a place where job seekers looking for a job. In such a place, there are many talented people. Since the woman was looking for a nice man for her daughter, such a market can satisfy her needs. (It's used in an ironic way.)
c) I am sorry for not having made myself clear. I am trying to say that she's looking for a man for her daughter who must earn more than 200,000 yuan per year.

Please help me with my new version (which is based on your corrections). The red phrase and word were added by me.

I recently talked to a woman on social media who was looking for a boyfriend for her daughter. While I wanted to know more about her daughter, I was appalled by what the woman really wanted. She kept asking me if I am able to earn 200,000 yuan per year, and how much property I own. I told her I was sure that they could find the ideal man in the ________ so they should go and look there.
 
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