[Grammar] IELTS GT Writing Task 1

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Hello, everyone!

I'm practicing to write letters for the IELTS exam and I would appreciate it if you could check my writing task. Task:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

- give details of your study plans
- explain why you want to get a part-time job
- suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear John,

I hope you're well, I'm writing to ask for your help to find some job for me as I'm going to study in your country.

A week ago I was informed that I'd passed exams of your local university and now I can apply for study course. My main subject will be Marketing Relationships and the course will start very soon. Also I've already found an accomodation for the first time. However, I couldn't find any job opportunity for students from abroad.

The thing I have to do some job is to save my family budget. Plane tickets wasn't the cheapest and also I have to pay for my apartment I've chosen to stay in. So, that is the thing which I need you to help with.

Unfortunately, seeking job by the Internet I haven't got a success. Perhaps, you could ask some local shops for the student job. I can do everything they need but only after my study hours. I would be really thankful if you help me.

Take care and write back soon.

Best wishes,

Dima
 

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Hello, everyone!

I'm practicing [STRIKE]to write[/STRIKE] writing letters for the IELTS exam and I would appreciate it if you could check my writing task.

Task: You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

- give details of your study plans
- explain why you want to get a part-time job
- suggest how your friend could help you find a job



Dear John,

I hope you're well. I'm writing to ask for your help [STRIKE]to find[/STRIKE] in finding me [STRIKE]some[/STRIKE] a part-time job [STRIKE]for me[/STRIKE] as I'm going to study in [STRIKE]your country[/STRIKE] [name of country].

A week ago, I was informed that I'd passed the entrance exams [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] for your local university and [STRIKE]now I can apply[/STRIKE] I've been given a place [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] on a [STRIKE]study[/STRIKE] course. My main subject will be Marketing Relationships and the course will start very soon. [STRIKE]Also[/STRIKE] I've already found [STRIKE]an[/STRIKE] accommodation. [STRIKE]for the first time.[/STRIKE] However, I [STRIKE]couldn't find[/STRIKE] haven't found any job opportunites for students from abroad.

[STRIKE]The thing[/STRIKE] I have to [STRIKE]do some job[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] get a job to [STRIKE]save[/STRIKE] help my family's budget. The plane tickets [STRIKE]wasn't[/STRIKE] weren't [STRIKE]the cheapest[/STRIKE] cheap and also I have to pay rent for [STRIKE]my[/STRIKE] the apartment. [STRIKE]I've chosen to stay in.[/STRIKE] So, [STRIKE]that is the thing which[/STRIKE] I need your [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] help with finding a job.

Unfortunately, [STRIKE]seeking[/STRIKE] looking for a job [STRIKE]by[/STRIKE] the internet [STRIKE]I haven't got a[/STRIKE] hasn't been successful. [STRIKE] [/STRIKE][STRIKE]you[/STRIKE] Could you ask at/in some local shops [STRIKE]for the[/STRIKE] to see if they have any [STRIKE]student[/STRIKE] part-time jobs for a student? I can do [STRIKE]everything[/STRIKE] anything [STRIKE]they need[/STRIKE] but I can work only after [STRIKE]my study hours[/STRIKE] I finish studying every day. I would be really [STRIKE]thankful[/STRIKE] grateful if you would help me.

Take care and write back soon.

Best wishes,

Dima

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