ielts 9
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- Jan 26, 2015
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- Arabic
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- Saudi Arabia
- Current Location
- Saudi Arabia
Hello every one
This is my first participation. I liked how you help each other and I would like to thank every one on this forum.
I'm preparing for my ielts exam and I want someone to give me a feedback on my writing also to score me.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the
following topic.
Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer
nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the
responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their
citizens themselves?
You should write at least 250 words.
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples
and with relevant evidence.
Many people believe that supporting poor with the accommodation and food they need is the responsibility of the government. While others believe that it’s a shared responsibility between the wealthy nation and the government.
I believe that the best way for country development is human synergy. Thus, the responsibility of supporting poor nations should be shared between us and the government for many reasons.
First of all, As a Moslem it’s an obligation to take a specific amount of your wealth annually and spend them on poor people. Secondly, if the process of supporting poor nations is assigned to just the government, the country will suffer from economic inequality. There will be an expanding gap between rich and poor people. For instance, the process of supporting poor nations in India is lied on the government and there is a huge gap between rich and poor. On the other hand, there is no gap between the poor and rich on the Arab Gulf countries because the wealthy nations are required by their religion to support the poor. Other example is the Us and UK, there is a gap between the rich and the poor nations but this gap is slight and this due to the taxes that is taken by the government from the wealths and the organizations’ to support the country as well the poor nations. Last but not least, a study shows that economic inequality is one of the main factors for suicide.
In conclusion, from all of the mentioned reasons I believe that the process of supporting poor nations should be shared between every rich citizen in the country and the government.
Thank you
This is my first participation. I liked how you help each other and I would like to thank every one on this forum.
I'm preparing for my ielts exam and I want someone to give me a feedback on my writing also to score me.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the
following topic.
Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer
nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the
responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their
citizens themselves?
You should write at least 250 words.
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples
and with relevant evidence.
Many people believe that supporting poor with the accommodation and food they need is the responsibility of the government. While others believe that it’s a shared responsibility between the wealthy nation and the government.
I believe that the best way for country development is human synergy. Thus, the responsibility of supporting poor nations should be shared between us and the government for many reasons.
First of all, As a Moslem it’s an obligation to take a specific amount of your wealth annually and spend them on poor people. Secondly, if the process of supporting poor nations is assigned to just the government, the country will suffer from economic inequality. There will be an expanding gap between rich and poor people. For instance, the process of supporting poor nations in India is lied on the government and there is a huge gap between rich and poor. On the other hand, there is no gap between the poor and rich on the Arab Gulf countries because the wealthy nations are required by their religion to support the poor. Other example is the Us and UK, there is a gap between the rich and the poor nations but this gap is slight and this due to the taxes that is taken by the government from the wealths and the organizations’ to support the country as well the poor nations. Last but not least, a study shows that economic inequality is one of the main factors for suicide.
In conclusion, from all of the mentioned reasons I believe that the process of supporting poor nations should be shared between every rich citizen in the country and the government.
Thank you