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[Anna232]

Are the parts in bold correct?

Some Georgian dishes are quite unusual. For example, a popular dish of meat and vegetables is made in a clay pot and is put into the fire. Such dishes are very delicious but they really are spicy. Here people eat a lot of fruit, citrus fruits and vegetables. Apples are very popular here maybe because they are helpful and rich with vitamins. I add them in my daily meals.

 

[teechar]

What did you write the above in response to?

 

[Tarheel]

Do you mean that the clay pot is put into an open fire?

I would say they are really spicy.

I'm not sure what you mean by "quite unusual". Do you mean you can find them nowhere else?

 

[Anna232]

What did you write the above in response to?

It is a small passage about traditional food.

 

[teechar]

[ 1] Some Georgian dishes are quite unusual. For example, a popular dish of meat and vegetables is made in a clay pot and is put into the fire. [ 2] Such dishes are very delicious but they really are spicy. [ 3] Here people eat a lot of fruit, citrus fruits and vegetables. [ 4] Apples are very popular here maybe because they are helpful and rich with vitamins. I add them in my daily meals.

1: If the paragraph is meant to be about traditional food, then this is the wrong opening sentence (it talks about unusual food). Note where it has led you!

2: Are all such dishes spicy? Hint: if they're not all spicy, use a word such as "often" in that sentence.

3: This is an example of lack of cohesion. You jump suddenly from unusual dishes to fruit. You need to link your sentences somehow to make the paragraph flow better.

4: That's not well phrased, and it certainly doesn't function well as a closing sentence for that paragraph.
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[Anna232]

1: If the paragraph is meant to be about traditional food, then this is the wrong opening sentence (it talks about unusual food). Note where it has led you!

2: Are all such dishes spicy? Hint: if they're not all spicy, use a word such as "often" in that sentence.

3: This is an example of lack of cohesion. You jump suddenly from unusual dishes to fruit. You need to link your sentences somehow to make the paragraph flow better.

4: That's not well phrased, and it certainly doesn't function well as a closing sentence for that paragraph.

I have tried to change it a little.
4] Apples are very popular here maybe because they are healthy and rich in vitamins. I eat them daily. Or I include/add them in my daily food intake.

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I also had to mention unusual teaditional food.

 

[Tarheel]

I have CHANGED it a little.
4] Apples are very popular here maybe because they are healthy and rich in vitamins. I eat them daily. Or I include/add them in my daily food intake.

Delete the part after "daily".

 

[Tarheel]

I also had to mention unusual tRaditional food.

It's unclear why you had to do that, but OK.

 

[emsr2d2]

It is a small passage about traditional food.

I also had to mention unusual traditional food.

Neither of these tell us what the exact prompt was or where you found it.

 

[teechar]

Indeed. I'd like to see the exact prompt.

 

[Anna232]

Neither of these tell us what the exact prompt was or where you found it.

I use different prompts I find on the internet. I was using this one below, too, but the question I wrote was based on another one. I can't find it now. Sorry. https://www.nytimes.com/2023/11/16/learning/writing-prompts-about-food-family-and-culture.html

 

[Anna232]

Delete the part after "daily".

Do you mean "I include/add them in my daily food intake?" Is it wrong?

 

[emsr2d2]

I use different prompts I find on the internet. I was using this one below, too, but the question I wrote was based on another one. I can't find it now. Sorry. https://www.nytimes.com/2023/11/16/learning/writing-prompts-about-food-family-and-culture.html

In future, please remember to copy/photo/screenshot etc anything you plan to use later on this forum. It's hard for us to comment on whether the piece you wrote is any good for the context if we can't see what you were asked to write!

Do you mean "I include/add them in my daily food intake?" Is it wrong?

I don't think Tarheel realised that you were giving us two options:
1. I eat them daily.
2. I include/add them in my daily food intake.
I believe he thought you were planning to include both sentences, and the word "or", in the finished piece.
Anyway, "I eat them every day" or "I eat them daily" suffices. Your second suggestion is unnecessarily wordy. (Also, it would be "include in" but "add to".)

 

[Tarheel]

Do you mean "I include/add them in my daily food intake?" Is it wrong?

I have never in my life used that phrase. However, if you insist on doing that then go right ahead. However, it seems to me to be totally unnecessary. You said you eat apples daily. There is no "Or" unless you are going to say something like "Or you don't", which makes no sense.