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poongodi

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Please correct my sentence. I have 2 sentences for the same purpose. Tell me which will be the right choice.

1.I have put a request for newspaper bill in hrms(Human Resource Management System). Please reject the bills.

2.I have initiated a request in hrms for newspaper. Please reject the bill
 

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Please correct my sentences [STRIKE]. I have 2 sentences for the same purpose.[/STRIKE] and tell me which [STRIKE]will[/STRIKE] might be the [STRIKE]right[/STRIKE] better choice.

1.I have put a request for newspaper bill in hrms(Human Resource Management System). Please reject the bills.

2.I have initiated a request in hrms for newspaper. Please reject the bill
I don't understand either. Please use simpler and clearer language to express your meaning.
 

poongodi

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There is a provision in my working unit to reimburse the amount spent for newspaper every month. That reimbursement request need to be raised through the internal website(that is called hrms). I have applied for a wrong amount.So I need to request the employer to reject my request
 

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I erroneously claimed for [amount of money] from HRMS on [date]. Please cancel the claim. I will submit a claim for the correct amount in due course.
 

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Thank you sir. Shall I write, please cancel all my reimbursement requests in hrms ???
 

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Thank you. [STRIKE]sir.[/STRIKE] Don't refer to users here as "sir". It suggests that you assume we are all male.

Shall I write (no comma here) "Please cancel all my reimbursement requests in [STRIKE]hrms[/STRIKE] HRMS"? [STRIKE]???[/STRIKE]

Note my corrections above.

I don't know if you should write that. Do you want them to cancel all your requests or only the one that contained the incorrect figure?
 
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