Ikigai
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Please give me some feedbacks about my writing task 2 for task achievement, Lexical resource, cohesion and coherence,.... Thanks you guys so much !
The question:
Some people believe that economic progress is the only factor that can be used to measure a country’s success. Some others argue that there are some other factors. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.
My response:
The Economic progress has been used as method to measure that country is whether success or not and yet it is believed that there are more crucial factor than just one. In reality, I partly don’t believe that one aspect is enough to be more important than the others so there is still a number of factors which might be encountered while considering the success of a country.
One the one hand, i think that one major aspect just like economic progress seems to be not sufficient to indicate whether that country is successful or not. However, being managed to earn the economic growth significantly might be actually the key to solve many problems at a few of circumstances. Others sector might sometimes not be in that country’s strengths. Many countries especially in America, the economic progress is mostly tended to improve so that the government might help the other field to rise more moderately, for instance. Hence, one major are mostly not enough to judge a country’s success.
On the other hand, it sometimes right to evaluate in a number of aspects whenever we judge that one successful country. In addition, the living basis needs and quantity of available jobs in could be taken into consideration. Social welfare is usually the most thing that many governments might ever think about because of its necessary in order to assist people in the country. Dubai is a city in the UAE despites the fact that this city’s strength is economic, the city still have to face with many social problems such as the rights to people, polluted environment and the other problem, for example. As a result, there is an amount things that should be considered.
In conclusion, only economic progress is made to seek a country’s success that is just true to some countries and yet people should have a right point of view about this argument in order to consider the other factor as well .
The question:
Some people believe that economic progress is the only factor that can be used to measure a country’s success. Some others argue that there are some other factors. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.
My response:
The Economic progress has been used as method to measure that country is whether success or not and yet it is believed that there are more crucial factor than just one. In reality, I partly don’t believe that one aspect is enough to be more important than the others so there is still a number of factors which might be encountered while considering the success of a country.
One the one hand, i think that one major aspect just like economic progress seems to be not sufficient to indicate whether that country is successful or not. However, being managed to earn the economic growth significantly might be actually the key to solve many problems at a few of circumstances. Others sector might sometimes not be in that country’s strengths. Many countries especially in America, the economic progress is mostly tended to improve so that the government might help the other field to rise more moderately, for instance. Hence, one major are mostly not enough to judge a country’s success.
On the other hand, it sometimes right to evaluate in a number of aspects whenever we judge that one successful country. In addition, the living basis needs and quantity of available jobs in could be taken into consideration. Social welfare is usually the most thing that many governments might ever think about because of its necessary in order to assist people in the country. Dubai is a city in the UAE despites the fact that this city’s strength is economic, the city still have to face with many social problems such as the rights to people, polluted environment and the other problem, for example. As a result, there is an amount things that should be considered.
In conclusion, only economic progress is made to seek a country’s success that is just true to some countries and yet people should have a right point of view about this argument in order to consider the other factor as well .
I am sorry... .
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