"The maps illustrate how Pebbleton was 20 years ago and now.Overall, Pebbleton has become not only more residential, but also more..."

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The maps illustrate how Pebbleton was 20 years ago and now.

Overall, Pebbleton has become not only more residential, but also more child-friendly. A footbridge and recreation facilities have also been added.

A sea and a river partially surround Pebbleton. 20 years ago, in the east of the town, there were trees and a roundabout from which Old Fort Road and a roadbridge originated. Whereas Old Fort Road ran east-west and branched off to form Lighthouse Lane, the roadbridge ran southernly across the river, connecting to Coast Road, in the south. To the south of Coast Road was a school and several trees, and there were houses north of Lighthouse Lane, a rectangular playing field south of it, and a lighthouse, film studio, and Old Fort west of it.

Right now, however, although the lighthouse, school, trees, playing field, and roads have been left untouched, Old Fort and the film studio have been turned into a children's playground and flats respectively. Furthermore, more houses, tennis courts, a community centre, footbridge, and footpath have been constructed in the western section.
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For copyright reasons we need to know the source and author of all quoted material. If you wrote this yourself, please say so.
 
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For copyright reasons we need to know the source and author of all quoted material. If you wrote this yourself, please say so.
I wrote it, and I've indicated that.
 

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I wrote it, and I've indicated that.
It would be a good idea to open such posts with "I wrote the following piece. Please help me by correcting it where necessary." That way, people don't have to get all the way to the end of the text before finding "Source: me".
 

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Perhaps:

The maps indicate Pembleton 20 years ago compared to now.
 

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"A footbridge and recreation facilities have also been added."

In addition to what?

I assume the footbridge and recreation facilities are new construction, but why do you say "have also been added" if nothing else is mentioned?
 
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