hardyweineberg
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The two maps depict how the town of Langley was in 1910 and 1950.
Overall, between those years, Langley was transformed from an industrial town into a child-friendly one with bigger buildings. It, moreover, lost its railway line and railway workers' cottages (railway transport system).
In 1910, the north of Langley had a factory, to the east of which was a wasteland and to the south of which was a group of houses lined east-west. There were a store and laundry east of these houses. The south of the town, by contrast, had a railway line, cottages for railway workers, houses, a wasteland, and a cafe. It is worth noting that the houses, store, laundry, and cafe were all along Sherman Street, situated at the centre of the town. Additionally, at the far west, two columns of townhouses could be seen along Jordan Street.
However, by 1950, the factory and the houses immediately south of it had been demolished, Sherman Mansions had been erected on the site, and the laundry and cafe had been relocated to the west of these mansions. Although Jordan Street remained, the houses along it were destroyed, and flats were built along its western side. In 1950, moreover, Jordan Street was directly connected to Sherman Street, which also had a direct connection to "New Lane", separating Sherman Park from a column of three stores. In order to construct this park--containing a pond, children's play area, and trees--and these stores, the railway line, railway workers' cottages, and houses were removed, and, as mentioned earlier, the cafe was relocated.
First of all, all my questions are about the sentences in the last paragraph.
1) Is my use of the past perfect tense in the first sentence of the last paragraph correct? Or should I have used the past simple tense and written "... mansions were erected on the..."?
2) "...this park--containing a pond, children's play area, and trees--and..."
Is it okay to reduce a relative clause in this way? Instead of writing "which contained a pond...", I wrote " containing...", and I'm not sure whether that's okay.
3) "'New Lane', separating Sherman Park from a column of three stores."
Once again, did I grammatically reduce the relative clause?
Overall, between those years, Langley was transformed from an industrial town into a child-friendly one with bigger buildings. It, moreover, lost its railway line and railway workers' cottages (railway transport system).
In 1910, the north of Langley had a factory, to the east of which was a wasteland and to the south of which was a group of houses lined east-west. There were a store and laundry east of these houses. The south of the town, by contrast, had a railway line, cottages for railway workers, houses, a wasteland, and a cafe. It is worth noting that the houses, store, laundry, and cafe were all along Sherman Street, situated at the centre of the town. Additionally, at the far west, two columns of townhouses could be seen along Jordan Street.
However, by 1950, the factory and the houses immediately south of it had been demolished, Sherman Mansions had been erected on the site, and the laundry and cafe had been relocated to the west of these mansions. Although Jordan Street remained, the houses along it were destroyed, and flats were built along its western side. In 1950, moreover, Jordan Street was directly connected to Sherman Street, which also had a direct connection to "New Lane", separating Sherman Park from a column of three stores. In order to construct this park--containing a pond, children's play area, and trees--and these stores, the railway line, railway workers' cottages, and houses were removed, and, as mentioned earlier, the cafe was relocated.
First of all, all my questions are about the sentences in the last paragraph.
1) Is my use of the past perfect tense in the first sentence of the last paragraph correct? Or should I have used the past simple tense and written "... mansions were erected on the..."?
2) "...this park--containing a pond, children's play area, and trees--and..."
Is it okay to reduce a relative clause in this way? Instead of writing "which contained a pond...", I wrote " containing...", and I'm not sure whether that's okay.
3) "'New Lane', separating Sherman Park from a column of three stores."
Once again, did I grammatically reduce the relative clause?
