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This endless queue on the outskirts of Bengaluru made no sense. It wasn't an entrance test since a majority of the crowd didn't look like students.They weren't standing for alcohol either since liquor shops had been open for months. Lining up for a Covid-19 vaccine also seemed like a far-fetched idea just yet. But then it became clear these locals were after an entirely different fix. Hoskote's much-hyped "Anand Dam Biryani" had finally opened its doors after lockdown rules were relaxed here. Bengalurites had formed a 1.5 kilometre long queue just to scratch their Biryani itch.
 

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This endless queue on the outskirts of Bengaluru made no sense. It wasn't an entrance test since a majority of the crowd didn't look like students.They weren't standing for alcohol either since liquor shops had been open for months. Lining up for a Covid-19 vaccine also seemed like a far-fetched idea just yet. But then it became clear these locals were after an entirely different fix. Hoskote's much-hyped "Anand Dam Biryani" had finally opened its doors after lockdown rules were relaxed here. Bengalurites had formed a 1.5 kilometre long queue just to scratch their Biryani itch.
I don't understand it, but I don't see any mistakes.
 

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This endless queue on the outskirts of Bengaluru made no sense. It wasn't for an entrance exam [STRIKE]test[/STRIKE] since a majority of the crowd didn't look like students. They weren't [STRIKE]standing[/STRIKE] queuing for alcohol either since liquor shops had been open for months. Lining up for a Covid-19 vaccine also seemed like a far-fetched idea just yet. But then it became clear these locals were after an entirely different fix. Hoskote's much-hyped "Anand Dam Biryani" had finally opened its doors after lockdown rules were relaxed here. Bengalurites had formed a 1.5-kilometre long queue just to [STRIKE]scratch[/STRIKE] satisfy their craving for Biryani. [STRIKE]itch.[/STRIKE]

Try that.
 

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Shouldn't it be "1.5-kilometre-long"? Without the second hyphen, it's a "long queue" with the length preceding it.
 

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I agree that it should, but I think (and I could be wrong on that) that the trendy style nowadays is to omit the second hyphen.
 

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I agree that it should, but I think (and I could be wrong on that) that the trendy style nowadays is to omit the second hyphen.

Well, there go my "trendy stylish" credentials! :lol:
 

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I agree that it should, but I think (and I could be wrong on that) that the trendy style nowadays is to omit the second hyphen.
Writing everyday when you mean every day and beginning declarative sentences with So are trendy, too. But I wouldn't teach students to do it.
 
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